Thread: Death Devil - Chapter I: Pages 1-2
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Old September 20th, 2008   #3 (permalink)
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Default Re: Death Devil - Chapter I: Pages 1-2
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Originally Posted by BaG 2.0 View Post
Its cool, but there are a few grammar problems...

"To prevent from ever happening again"
should be
"To prevent this from ever happening again"

"So there is the stairs huh?"
Should be
"So, there are the stairs, huh?"

Parobably (probably) more, but I'm not too good at it myself...
That's why I stopped correcting people, cause assholes like myself point out when the corrector makes a spelling/grammar mistake ;D
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