Legend of Chaos

[sonic695]

yo everyone this is the Comic idea i said i had a long while ago when i joined, to tell you the truth i find it hard to work on these things all the time, so the Comic isint that well done yet, infact i havent even finished making the first chapter yet, but belive me i have a whole story wrote out, BaG_2.0 has been helping alot here recently, mostly with being a critic for my work, (more like a pain in the ass) anyway it has been very helpfull anyway i supose ill just post the cover of Chapter One, id love MOSTLY positive comments, and a few negitive, if it has good reason




Lastly forgive my horrible spelling, im rather tierd as of this moment

[sonic695]

i hate to say it but no replys tell me ya'll dont like this, can i please get some replys on honnest oppionons

[Kinspin]

The art work looks pretty good. Great to see its not sprites. Hope the rest of the comic follows this style.

[Professor Ztar]

Whoops, I must not have seen this. (>~<)
Very Nicely done, and like Kinspin Said, glad to see a graphic novel (hand-drawn) for once instead of a comic (Sprites).
I like the water effects you did. It adds a touch of awesomeness to it.

[BaG 2.0]

Ummm... I've been helping him with it, and it IS sprites... But his story kicks some major assage.

[Professor Ztar]

Ah, so it's a sprite comic with a good story. Well, It's better than a sprite comic with a completely-stung-together-at-the-last-moment story.

[sonic695]

ok everyone im glad yall like it but first and formost let me say, i did not draw this, a very good freind of mine did however, she has drawn alot of covers for it, and another thing, it is sprites, however ive been working hard on the story so i belive i can make it work well, and finaly i do not plan to have any fan-characters, however i have gotten permission to use AkumaTH (from mgcomics.com ) do you guys wish to see more of the covers, or want to know a little more about the story itself. (i will only do one or the other so as not to spoil too much,)

[Professor Ztar]

My votes for the covers so that way the plot isn't spoiled.

[sonic695]

All righty here it is the cover to chapter two, its a little big but i didint resize it becouse i wanted everyone to be sure of the details
~=(WARNING SEMI-MAJOR SPOILERS)=~ not alot though

http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/9692/chapter2cover.png

[Kinspin]

Well that's a bummer its not drawn. I noticed something that I don't like, and its up to you if you want to change it. The name is a bit cliche. Legends of Chaos. Two words that seem to be used a lot in video game spin-off comics.

[sonic695]

Originally Posted by Kinspin

Well that's a bummer its not drawn. I noticed something that I don't like, and its up to you if you want to change it. The name is a bit cliche. Legends of Chaos. Two words that seem to be used a lot in video game spin-off comics.

aye i know its overused but alas i figured to use the those words becouse the story has to do

Spoilers:

with the Chaos emeralds and a Legend having to do with them, and Sonic

so yea that's why

[TonyComix]

lol, great spoilers.
I like the style for the covers, but like Kinspin said about the title, but no worries, title doesn't matter all that much as long as the story is good. Think ASS - A SoGGy Story, you think his story was pieced together at last minute??? I hope not.

[sonic695]

thanks tony, and to everyone whom actully wants to see the comic itself, well its coming, but it will be a while longer... im going to post chapter by chapter, becouse i hate waiting for new issues every week, the way im hoping it will work is with every month or so ill have a whole new chapter, and filler inbetween chapters every other week possibly....i hope

[sonic695]

sorry for double post


Allright everyone i wanted to keep it mostly a secret but i just cant hold it any longer, so ill tell you all the story of chapter one in The Legend of Chaos...

Chapter One: Eternal Peace



its been 10 years since the Last Sonic game (at this time, unleashed)
Sonic is age 25, and has gotten married to Amy Age 23, they live peacefully on emerald island, (wich i maped off the coast of florida) untill Sonics best freind Miles "tails" prower pays them a visit, after lunch Tails asks Sonic if he would like to go into the city to fight some small crime, to relive the old days, Sonic agrees... after a short flight on the tornado 2 Sonic and Tails arive in Station Square (wich i maped to be atlanta) after some searching they find, and stop a bank robbery, all goes fine, however... as they walk away one of the theives gets up and shoots at Sonic, Tails jumps in the way but it still hits Sonic's leg, Sonic passes out from the pain and is rushed to a hospital, after the bullet is removed Sonic is sent back home, on the orders to stay off his leg for 3 weeks (due to Sonic's Fast healing rate) However the timing couldent had been worse... Dr. Ivo "Eggman" julian Robotnik who hasent been seen in over 7 years returns with his DeathEgg and fully Charged twin eclipse cannons aimed right at earth, he gives his demands, surrender or die. Sonic gets up out of bed as Eggman is finishing his demands stating that if he detects any energy from the chaos emeralds, he will fire right away, so Sonic running as fast as he can, even with his bad leg attempts to gather all the emeralds he can as fast as he can, he only ends up finding 4 of them, and attempts to turn into Super Sonic, the Transformation succeeds partaly, Sonic gains the power of flight and the ability to control chaos energy, but not the strength and near invurnability. Eggman detecting this fires the cannons as Semi-Super Sonic, flys up to attempt to stop it.
he slows down the cannons blasts untill he is pushed into the ground, as a last ditch effort he uses chaos control to teleport himself, and the cannons energy away from the planet...GUN begins an attack on the DeathEgg forcing Eggman to retreat inorder to recharge, however Sonic was luckly teleported near the ARKs ruins, with the last of his energy he pulls himself into the ARK then faints, the last scene is the DeathEgg pulling back into space... Chapter One END


and thats the story of chapter one, id love comments, or ideas, thanks later


~Sonic695

[Kinspin]

Hmm, my thoughts on it. It seems like a good start but its missing story elements that will make people want to read it. The first chapter has to be interesting enough for people to read and give them a reason to come back.
It seems like a very episodic chapter where all the problems are resolved in it, leaving no reason to continue reading because the next chapter could be anything. It also has a big problem with character development. Sonic isn't losing anything. We need to be able to sympathize for him or root for him. Follow the hero myth.

Luke Skywalker meets Obi-Wan, who sets him on his quest.
Harry Potter meets Hagrid, who gets him started on his wizard training.
Sonic sees Tails again, who sets him on his adventure.

Luke Skywalker lost his home because of the Stormtroopers.
Harry Potter lost his family because of Voldemort
Sonic loses Amy because of Robotnik

The choice is yours though on what to do, only trying to help out.

[sonic695]

Originally Posted by Kinspin

Hmm, my thoughts on it. It seems like a good start but its missing story elements that will make people want to read it. The first chapter has to be interesting enough for people to read and give them a reason to come back.
It seems like a very episodic chapter where all the problems are resolved in it, leaving no reason to continue reading because the next chapter could be anything. It also has a big problem with character development. Sonic isn't losing anything. We need to be able to sympathize for him or root for him. Follow the hero myth.

Luke Skywalker meets Obi-Wan, who sets him on his quest.
Harry Potter meets Hagrid, who gets him started on his wizard training.
Sonic sees Tails again, who sets him on his adventure.

Luke Skywalker lost his home because of the Stormtroopers.
Harry Potter lost his family because of Voldemort
Sonic loses Amy because of Robotnik

The choice is yours though on what to do, only trying to help out.

yea i see what you mean, but ive made it so Sonic is stuck on the ARK without the chaos emeralds, and ive also made it like a love story so that all he really wants is to be with the girl he alwase loved, Amy, meanwhile everyone on earth has no trace of where Sonic went, so they all belive him to be dead, and they even hold a rememberence for him

[BaG 2.0]

Posting so Sonic695 can post with out double posting.

I would comment, but he already knows what I think, and I'm to dang lazy to type it out.

[sonic695]

Hello everyone, i just wish to inform you all that the reason i havent been doing alot with the comic is becouse ive been working at a haunted house, never before has a job litteraly killed me. and never before have i had so much fun with a job that makes me so damn tierd, however as i write this on november 1st, tonight is my last night of working there, untill next year... so expect some more details on the comic, and perhaps if i feel like it some actual pages.

Hope to see you all soon again, with pages

~Sonic695

[sonic695]

Hello everyone once again! before i get to busness id like to apologise for Double Posting, now that thats out of the way i can get to the meat of this post,


i told you all a little while ago, id be here with actual pages....well ive got good news....and not so good news....


lets start with the not so good: Becouse of how i work, i like to finish a chapter BEFORE i add any words/word bubbles...so that way i can get any plot advancements or anything out of the way before adding text, now i realise this might be strange to some of you but this is how i am comfortable spriting.


now for the good news: I shall be posting detailed Bios of the characters i use, now please note i like to call these Custom Versions however there are no Fan characters....well thats a lie, there are maybe a few...however they are rather big names such as AkumaTH from the Middle Ground alas...
"My" versions of the Characters arent far diffrent from the normal versions, just with some changes that adds some "Flare, Wits, or Spunk" to them, as well as making them a bit easyer to write them out, For example: Sonic's original personality is still there, however ive "moulded" it to match my personality, as they are almost exactly alike. i hope the changes are so tiny nobody will notice them out right, but this just makes it easyer for me to write him.

Anyway ive rambled on so here is the reason i made the post, i give you


My Version of Sonic Hedgehog's Bio:

Name: Sonic Hedgehog

Nicknames: Blue Blur, Fastest thing alive, Knight of the wind Hero of Chaos

Age: 24

Species: Hedgehog

Gender: Male

Height: 4 Ft

Weight: 75 Lbs

IQ: 130

Marital Status: Married, Amy Hedgehog

DOB: June 23

Birth Place: Christmas Island (in the Comic, Chistmas Island IS Amarican Land

Residence: Green Hill Zone

Occupation: None

Social Class: Smart Ass Vigilante

Economic Class: Lower-Middle class

Alignment: Pure in heart, alwase for what he see's is Right, or the Master Emeralds influence

Top Speed: ??? (just under the speed of light with chaos control) Without chaos control Mach 5-6

Basic Stats (higher the number, more skilled he is)
Agility - 100%
Speed - 105%
Strength - 85%
Defense - 80%
Evasiveness - 95%
Dexterity - 100%
Intelligence - 90%
Skill - 100%

Special Attacks: All the same as normal, however he can now use his inner energy to attack, fly, and clear his mind, he can also use his will power to transform into super for a limited time

Abilities & Aptitude: Same as normal,

Hobbies & Talents: Same as normal exepct for the fact that ever since he became the Hero of Chaos, he loves to learn new things, mostly ancient lore/myths/legends

Weaknesses: is a SMART ASS, and will not hesitate to make a comment or remark, unless there are FAR more pressing matters at hand is afread of deep water, (Learned how to keep afloat but cannot swim)

Personal facts
Friends: Miles "Tails" Prower, Knucles the echinda, Amy Hedgehog (Wife), Tony the Hedgehog, Project Shadow, Akuma the Hedgehog
Rivals: Project Shadow, Akuma the Hedgehog, Tony the Hedgehog
Enemies: Dr. Ivo "Eggman" Julian Robotnik
Known relatives: Amy (Wife) Miles ("Adoptive" brother)
Likes/Favorite activities: Running, Studying, Fighting
Dislikes/Least favorite activities: Bringing innocents harm,
Gourmet of choice: Amy's Chili Dogs
Beverages of choice: Water, Milk
Favorite color(s): Blue, Red, Green

Personality: Same

Attire: Friction resistant shoes & gloves, Alternate SOAP shoes with the same propertys, however Sonic cannot run full speed with them, for he finds them uncofortable at high speeds

Items & Weapons: His fists and feet, Sword (if need be), Chaos Emeralds/Chaos Control.

Vehicles: The Tornado I or II

Themesong: Normal: It dosent matter, Combat: Live and Learn (epic mix), Serous Battle: Solaris Phase II, Final Battle: Sonic's Final Stand

Back Story: Same as normal (Explain more later)



More to come on other characters, please comment, or question i will do what i can to Anser them


Ps: ok i admit it i am a horrible speller, and too damn lazy to use spell check outside of comic's/school work, please excuse it



~Sonic695

[TonyComix]

Awesome update! I will be posting this back up there in the announcements.

[sonic695]

Alright thanks alot Tony however, i would like to say that i CANNOT update constantly, but when i DO update it is in bulk so when i do update expect around anywhere from 5-25 or possibly even in the HUNDREDS (highly doubt it) but thats about it ^^


~Sonic695